It works! It's better than what I can do already. While there's a lot of room for improvement, it seems you're on the right path.

She looks amazing! Top notch shit you got here, well done.

Dem pepperonis! Apparently, Mona became extra deluxe THICC, this is a thing now! lol

Good job, good job! We can tell for sure it's Lorelei, and you also put your personal style into it. That's how fanart should be done...